Wednesday, May 27, 2009

3ww-alliteration alley

Drat on the dum dum dreary day
discounted duties dragging on
does dilly dally drink me down

spread me around
like butter on burnt toast

Early easter eves eager
eyelight on everyone's eulogy
even I eked out entertainment

behind a movie theater
at 2 in the morning

Too too timidly touching
tasty tidbits of total tenderness
thunderroll taking tremendous toll

on you and me
and what I suppose to never be.


  1. Alliteration can get a bit too much for me, but you pulled this off really well. The promise and the delivery.

  2. Nice alliteration. Sounds like someone was busy. Hope all is well. Have a nice day.

  3. Great use of alliteration - not too much, not too little, just right! A rhythmic beat.

  4. Yeah, this is right up my alley!
    Very nicely written!!

  5. The structure is good, but I love the drama here. You've done a great job painting three shadowy images and then switching the light on with the following sentences. Love this!