Drat on the dum dum dreary day
discounted duties dragging on
does dilly dally drink me down
spread me around
like butter on burnt toast
Early easter eves eager
eyelight on everyone's eulogy
even I eked out entertainment
behind a movie theater
at 2 in the morning
Too too timidly touching
tasty tidbits of total tenderness
thunderroll taking tremendous toll
on you and me
and what I suppose to never be.
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Alliteration can get a bit too much for me, but you pulled this off really well. The promise and the delivery.
ReplyDeleteNice alliteration. Sounds like someone was busy. Hope all is well. Have a nice day.
ReplyDeleteGreat use of alliteration - not too much, not too little, just right! A rhythmic beat.
ReplyDeleteI am a sucker for alliteration. Loved this!
ReplyDeletetimid embrace forces out dreary thoughts
Yeah, this is right up my alley!
ReplyDeleteVery nicely written!!
The structure is good, but I love the drama here. You've done a great job painting three shadowy images and then switching the light on with the following sentences. Love this!
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